Jung
confused and asked “Seventy years? How old are you then?” and the old woman
said that he had lived for one hundred twenty three years and it was really
shocking him. The old woman said to him that it was acceptable to call her
grandma and Jung did so. “Grandma ...
Can I sleepover here for just one night? Tomorrow, I will be back to my
village.” Said Jung to her. Grandma gladly showed him his room and Jung slept
there right after. He did not know what would happen tomorrow and he did not
want to over think it. He just wanted to rest that night.
When the sun was rising, Jung woke up and saw grandma in
the backyard. He went to her and then she smiled to him. Grandma invited Jung
to come to the dining room and had a breakfast. While he was eating, he was
looking around. He found out that Grandma had a lot of potion. After he had
eaten his breakfast he said goodbye to grandma and grandma brought him her
potion. She said that it would be useful for his health. Grandma brought him
three potion and he thought it would be suitable for him because he could drink
one and gave the other two for his wife and his only son.
On the way home, the sun has already
high so he could see the path better and he found the way to his village
easily. When he arrived, Sarah embrace him tight because she could not sleep at
night thinking about him. She was pleased to see her husband came back safely. They
were waiting Johnny while they were talking. Not long after, His son came back
from the river with two fish. The fish supposed to be their lunch so Sarah
cooked the fish so they could eat it. After eating their lunch, they became thirsty
and Jung remembered about grandma potion. He thought it will be good if they
drink it, so he opened his bag and took three glass of potion. He gave it to
his wife and son and they drank it. The potion was refreshing, however it made
them sleepy so they went to their room and sleep. They woke up the day after
and found out a big problem.
Nice story Stell! Interesting story, but I think it is too short maybe you can elaborate your story and add some conversation. Overall you are doing great!
ReplyDeleteFor me,in my opinion. The story is too short and i thought "jung" will face danger by staying over the grandma's house but nothing happened. so it is quite like the anti-climax. Agreed with Bella's opinion, you should add some conversation so it will be more interesting. Keep up your work~
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